Aw, cute. :3
I would say you're like a diamond in the rough: Sparkling, with just minor refining needed. It was a little hard to hear over the music at points, but just a tiny (and by that, minuscule) work on slowing down a tiny bit on speaking would make it as close to perfect as possible.
And don't feel like I'm over-critical, I talk too fast, too.

( ^ Chika's pirate wink)
So, like DJ said, WELCOME!